Two Haikus

The sound of flip-flops
Walking down a narrow hall
Yay, an empty pool!

Through the fogged window
When will it start to blossom
A lone bare tree branch

I feel the first one is stronger than the second. I think the second one might need more work. It just doesn’t feel right, just yet. Almost. What do you think?

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